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Writer's "Block"

Started by wither-I, Apr 24, 2008, 03:40 AM

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wither-I

yeah that was really cool.

and yess bring more and welcome!

bless!

"coming into the nearness of distance"

theshadeisatool

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theshadeisatool

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occipudding

so are we posting all our poetry here or just on-the-spot shit?  whatever, i started this last night, just finished it.  it's about my friend's daughter.  don't have a title yet.

At spat longevity
Shrewd acrobatics
A day, a word, eyes lash-batted
In a moment, you solidified
Wake up to the fuse, then metastasize
I wanna know what you'd be like
I wanna know how you like life
When you're cognition and a time card
I hope the hood don't eat you alive
I hope you learn and grow
And laugh and thrive
I hope the world is kind
To you and your's
I hope God don't sickle the cells
You still have yet to learn to breathe
And don't forget to pull as much as release
I'm sorry for the roaches, I'm sorry for the mice
For all the coming days and all the coming nights
Of frustration
Of disappointment
We've all been there
And we just sat around
We ached like a beggar's back
Then we died at the cliff
I hope you're better then
I hope you're smarter then
I hope you touch a satellite
Life
is autonomic recoil
Somatic elopement
But don't be too scared
You can make it with a flimsy plan
machete!  meow

theshadeisatool

I'm liking that occi. As always it's straight into it, with no filler blandness - 'At spat longevity'  - just pertenance. A good riff to it.

If you click on that gruesome link in the post above, the poem you see is also somewhat untitled.

occipudding

cool shit.  what's the point of filler blandness?  some shit english professors can dissect when there's no real meaning to any of it anyway, just a buncha pretty words strung together.  boo.
machete!  meow

theshadeisatool

Exactly, that's what I'm into - minimalism. And also the esthetic of the word on the page/screen (or in the ear for that matter...)

Grandulon

Thanks, glad to join.

yo shadeisatool...I like what you have in your blog, that "make radio a terrorist" line is classic...it should be worked into designs on shirts or something.

Oh n that verse I dropped was improvised sittin here typing, seeing the works you all left made me get into a lil cypher mode....I'll def drop something later on tho.

theshadeisatool

Thanks grandulon. Just kinda set that up spontaneously.

This is great, it's what it should all be about - feeding off each other's word energy-chi-thing.

i kill for fun

i trust that you all will be honest and tell me how much this sucks...

what good is a day if you can't see the sun

what good is a life  if you only got one

what good is a man if he has none

who is to say what good means at all



by now, there is no more left hanging on the wall

they say that someone went and burned down it all

But what they really mean, is not what they wanna say

when you reach out to point, your pointing both ways



and if i can't figure this out, if i cant find the light

take mercy on me lord, cause i already tried

let me lay back and listen to the whole world breathe

for the final slumber this body must seek
"playful deception is the lowest form of Tom-foolery"
"i don't trust anything that bleeds for five days and doesn't die"

theshadeisatool

That doesn't suck at all! Anything is valid if it is coming from the soul I say. Personally, I envy your ability to rhyme - I struggle to do it!

Thanks for post.

theshadeisatool

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wither-I

Quote from: theshadeisatool on Apr 28, 2008, 11:43 PM
it's what it should all be about - feeding off each other's word energy-chi-thing.

Anything is valid if it is coming from the soul I say.

most love.

bless our block.


i wrote a song last night on the ole string box...

"Re-"

I will not, to hear your voice
in the echo of a song, long since sung
coming back, reverberating off some unseen bound
at the back of the void!

I will not, to see your face
in the stain of a  painting, long since faded and worn
rising up, emitting from some paled undertone
long since cured!

The further drawn out from you i become
-I become! more of my own
Yet without being sincerely gone,
you draw nearer, -valid as etchings in stone
reeling unwashed, -as the time which tried to forfeit the grain!
as accomplice to the ages, im only sore when i cycle out
relapse of the tired rubber, on a wheel going on and on and on!

I've won before,
I've never missed a pass,
I've won before,
I've won before Ghost!
-and I tell you Im not afraid!

"coming into the nearness of distance"

occipudding

Quote from: theshadeisatool on Apr 30, 2008, 03:36 PM
Anybody heard of that gspoetry.com thing? I just went past it on the net while searching...

i signed up and posted a good portion of the poems ive posted here.  http://www.gspoetry.com/member-occipudding-31324
machete!  meow

theshadeisatool

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Quote from: wither-I on Apr 30, 2008, 06:56 PM
Quote from: theshadeisatool on Apr 28, 2008, 11:43 PM
it's what it should all be about - feeding off each other's word energy-chi-thing.

Anything is valid if it is coming from the soul I say.

most love.

bless our block.


i wrote a song last night on the ole string box...

"Re-"

I will not, to hear your voice
in the echo of a song, long since sung
coming back, reverberating off some unseen bound
at the back of the void!

I will not, to see your face
in the stain of a  painting, long since faded and worn
rising up, emitting from some paled undertone
long since cured!

The further drawn out from you i become
-I become! more of my own
Yet without being sincerely gone,
you draw nearer, -valid as etchings in stone
reeling unwashed, -as the time which tried to forfeit the grain!
as accomplice to the ages, im only sore when i cycle out
relapse of the tired rubber, on a wheel going on and on and on!

I've won before,
I've never missed a pass,
I've won before,
I've won before Ghost!
-and I tell you Im not afraid!

Loving this one w-i. really like the structure/stanzas, good shit!

theshadeisatool

Not that there's the option to add, apparently... hehe

occipudding

Quote from: wither-I on Apr 30, 2008, 06:56 PM


"Re-"

I will not, to hear your voice
in the echo of a song, long since sung
coming back, reverberating off some unseen bound
at the back of the void!

I will not, to see your face
in the stain of a  painting, long since faded and worn
rising up, emitting from some paled undertone
long since cured!

The further drawn out from you i become
-I become! more of my own
Yet without being sincerely gone,
you draw nearer, -valid as etchings in stone
reeling unwashed, -as the time which tried to forfeit the grain!
as accomplice to the ages, im only sore when i cycle out
relapse of the tired rubber, on a wheel going on and on and on!

I've won before,
I've never missed a pass,
I've won before,
I've won before Ghost!
-and I tell you Im not afraid!

nice choice of words.
machete!  meow

occipudding

another on-spot:

And I'm pulled back to a dream
My wet mind drenches back
Dreams of the same girl
With a different face every time
Her black face slipping through a mall past gunfire and hidden enemies
Her green eyes hanging by telephone wire in the storm
Her pink lips tell me I can't escape
Her back pressed against a wooden door that changes its shape
Now she's from India and her brown fingers beckon me through the dead sea past a swarm of shark-lions
Towards her and the ship
To escape
To freedom
To coming awake
Once she was made of light
And she taught me how not to fall through space
How to build my own epicenter
How to create my own matter
How to be my own god
But I forgot
I woke up and I forgot it all
To visit her without slipping away
But motivation
Motivation's a bitch
machete!  meow

theshadeisatool

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Oh my gawd, brilliant as per usual. Cheers for the comments dude btw!

theshadeisatool

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