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Other => Art => Topic started by: theshadeisatool on Nov 25, 2007, 09:43 PM

Title: Nov 25 2007
Post by: theshadeisatool on Nov 25, 2007, 09:43 PM
Nov 25 2007
Title: Re: Perdóneme
Post by: wither-I on Nov 27, 2007, 03:37 AM
Quote from: theshadeisatool on Nov 25, 2007, 09:43 PM
Grant me a reprieve!
Write it down
Remember this and remember the sound (it made)
Record it in books
Tell the serfs
And I beseech you, don't deny me something I deserve
By telephony
Confirm the news
I've had enough and ready to pull punches, retract your views
I'm fine/fucking swine
Return to carriage and sign the fucking truce.

Be gentle...
(When will I be famous?)
pretty good. better than anything else ive read on this board...
Title: Re: Perdóneme
Post by: occipudding on Dec 17, 2007, 05:11 AM
mad good.  i like how you say (it made) in line 3.  kinda throws it off a little bit and brings you back into reality for a second.  irked me a little at first but it grew on me.  good shit
Title: Re: Perdóneme
Post by: theshadeisatool on Dec 17, 2007, 07:41 PM
Well thanks to both of you, I thought I'd get laughed out of here, just thought I'd test the water but appreciate the comments.