Sleep soundly tonight, and each on...
For, we may never die again.
I am panicky- a manic composite terror,
holding fast to the sinking forgeries of sureness,
cast as comfort,
laden in blissful dress,
denial rafted to evade direst.
Upon having unknown, beknown.
We together, faithfully burdened,
are liable to learn,
guilty to forget,
damned to ignore...
We all manifest our dreams- to live and die freely in them,
disparate,
comforted,
in all certainty as it seems...
we may divulge all together,
diving just before wading waters break,
squandering the pursuit of distant, slippery shores...
having never swam,
we may die,
before we wake.
-thoughts of concern for the concerning ones
Bravo! Enjoyablée.
thesaurus FTW.
Well I reckoned it was great dude...
Quote from: theshadeisatool on Jan 12, 2008, 06:10 PM
Well I reckoned it was great dude...
thanks man!! it means alot really!
i know some say i try too hard or whatever and claim i must sit around looking up adjectives... i do use a dictionary for spelling purposes mainly, but a few years back i started reading the dictionary straight trying to expand my vocabulary... so i guess thats what blondie was saying... everything i write is free flowing and I NEVer return to a writing more than twice because i feel it is best when its fresh you know... so what you read is what you get-straight up. nothing phony about it. sometimes its more abstract and sometimes blatant and brash but how it comes out is how it stays. newayzzz im rambling, thanks for the comments!
Not at all dude, keep at it. There's nothing wrong with adding a bit of variation to your work by using a dictionary I reckon! The GZA reads the dictionary. Especially if you want to be a bit more cryptic or less obvious. Just because something is constructed does not make it contrived.
Oh by the way, with this one I liked the little post-script.
Quote from: theshadeisatool on Jan 21, 2008, 03:28 PM
Oh by the way, with this one I liked the little post-script.
I have been signing off on alot of my writings, almost like a "sincerely", or "Truly yours" sort of thing, but not really... :)